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October 15, 2011
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That day when you tore away from me
you left me with a bitter taste in my mouth
and a pulsing darkness in my chest.
And that darkness, it consumed me whole,
leaving no traces of the person
I once was.

I wish that I could shed my skin
because each and every cell in my body knows
what your touches feel like,
and how your skin tastes.
But to me, you now taste bitter.

And every time I look at you,
all I can hear is those three words
you liked to hide behind,
that rolled out of your lips so smoothly.
I should have known then,
I've always stumbled over mine
before you stole them
off my tongue.

And I cannot say I hate you,
there is just this enormous


inside of me, that is filled
with nothing
but utter disappointment and
a hollow
      of your                                
~You built this prison by yourself,
dug this grave with your own hands.
Pretend this was never yours.
I love the way you lose yourself,
it makes it easier to forget you,
pretend this was never yours. ~
-Blessthefall [You deserve nothing and I hope you get less]

This is an old poem..I wrote it earlier this year :) just came across it while randomly browsing my computer when the internet was down...and I kinda liked it so I decided to post it :)
Thank you for reading, please tell me what you think! <3 *
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Demorach Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow :)
I think this will go well as a song :D
sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha thanks :D Really? How so? :D
Demorach Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I just get the vibe -
It's in such a good rhythm for a song.
It's also got powerful images and the story - telling that I personally believe a song should have.
Also, that last bit, with "void" emphasized and the slowly falling words like an echo - I think they will make sense in a song :D
Well, it's just my opinion, though :D
Do you mind if I try to write the music for this poem?
(though I'm not the best music writer... you know, like I'm still just a schoolgirl and all -___-)
sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: No of course I don't mind, I'd be honored, actually ! :D :hug: If you upload it on youtube or somewhere please do give me the link ;) :love:
Demorach Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the permit :D
I'm not sure if it'll be alright, but of course I'll give you the link!!!
Thank you :)
KittySib Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012
Wow! I really like it!:D
sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :heart:
KittySib Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
erco71 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! <3 :*
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