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They say it's difficult to love someone
When you can't even love yourself.
But I loved you nonetheless,
The problem was I didn't know when to stop.

You kept sending me mixed signs
Making me dizzy until I
Couldn't know
Left <--- from ---> right
Much less right
From wrong.

When our world started crumbling down and
T e a r i n g  at the seams
It was so easy for you to let it fall apart.
But I, knowing no other kind of love,
desperately clung to the remaining bits,
Trying to put them back together.

Yet the pieces changed too much, too quickly,
They kept growing and
growing  a p a r t,
until your world was only yours
and mine a hollow echo of its past.

Looking back now, it seems like it
All happened in a different life,
With some other you, some other me,
And the lips kissing my own were just a dream.
old poem :) please tell me what you think! any feedback is appreciated! ^^ :love:
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cholie Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
good golly, your writing is so amazing!
it's so real, so emotive, so beautiful.
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Always-A-Day-Dreamer Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this so much! It says a lot in so little words! I wish I had the talent to do that!
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Of course you do, all it takes is a little practice ^^
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niclo121212 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm DYING! :dead:
A beutiful poem.
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Noooo!!!!!!!!! *gives you CPR* :D Thank you :heart:
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niclo121212 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:
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Slug22 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Very good :)
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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geralsv Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think it's something we can all relate to at some point of our lives.
Very simple yet touching.
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :heart: I am sorry to hear you can relate to this, heartache is the worst kind of pain ... :)
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