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I never believed you,
I only wanted to.

.....

Lying back to back
I was counting your breaths
to make sure your lack of
heart
didn't leave you
dead.

....

Like a ghost
the fading memories of your touch
kept screaming
what I was trying to forget.

...

Oh, why did I give it up to you?

..

I know it's my fault.
My expectations were greater than
what you were willing to offer,
and I got scared.

I tried shutting you out,
to gather myself together
behind a shield of apathy,
but only ended up in
self-destruction.

.

Your kiss never tasted as
intoxicatingly bitter
as the last time
I made love to you...

Still, I cannot forget you
because
no matter how
little love you gave me,
it was still the most
I've ever received...



Thank you for reading! :heart: Please tell me what you think, any feedback is appreciated!
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AnotherPassenger Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The title of your poem was used here <3
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice! The words following this title were just amazing! :D :heart:
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AnotherPassenger Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much.
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Its beautiful and sad but wonderfully written
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :love: I'm glad you like it!
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Chrissijulius Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aww beautiful! I totally know how you feel...
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: :*
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Singer-Of-Light Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Thank you for sharing such raw real beautiful emotion
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading it! :heart: ;)
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Singer-Of-Light Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no prob!
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stickfigureparadise Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
to make sure your lack of
heart
didn't leave you
dead.

Is a great line. I love it.
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Countess-Jellybean Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It flows really well, it's amazing :D
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart: :)
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Lovingly beauteous <3
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
You're very welcome! :D
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dwkeiko Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this was really powerful,
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart: :D
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dwkeiko Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!:D
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Annibellee Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Aaah beautiful. :heart:
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Annibellee Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
c: No need.
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Nocturne-31 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's really amazing. People can relate and the emotion was representing excellently.
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart: I'm glad you can relate :D
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extrashot Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
I like this poem
hope that i can make it a song
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart: if you do make it into a song, make sure to link it to me :P
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Nakku-Naiome Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My word... I felt so sad reading this.. because I feel as though I can relate to the words you have written. This is a very strong piece of literature. The words you chose beautifully illustrate the visual of pain that I could sense as I read...
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
these are basically the crucial points of my relationship with my ex.
why it all fell apart...why it took me so long to get through the pain of losing him..:)
Thank you for reading and for the amazing comment! :tighthug:
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Nakku-Naiome Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I understand completely. I went through the same exact thing with my first love. It took me a little more than a year to finally get over him. Before that, I was a zombie. When it finally happened though, I felt so free like a tremendous weight had been finally lifted from my shoulders.

And you're welcome! It was my pleasure :)
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You were lucky, it took me longer than that,
every time I thought I was over him something happened
that made me suffer again.. :) Oh I know! It feels amazing
once you get the negative emotions out of your system for good! :)
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Nakku-Naiome Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I would have dreams about them every night. It seemed like my mind didn't want me to forget him, though I found out that dreaming about him was my mind's way of helping me to get over him faster. It worked out well in the end, though it would drive me crazy when I would have them.
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah same here :/
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