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Dear Boy number 1,
you turned my world upside down,
changed green into red and smiles to tears.
Who would've thought that
your teasing and your games would
plant a fear into my bones, so strong that
I still cannot shake it?

Dear Boy number 2,
I don't think about you anymore
but I don't think about you any less either.
Your love consumed me and
pushed me to the edge of insanity.
We were fire one second, ice the next,
battle wounds were inflicted just to get a taste of blood.
We were right in all the wrong ways, but to you,
holding another was second nature.

Dear Boy number 3,
you only ever touched me
in the dark alleys of town,
out of sight, but you were never
out of my mind.
Your kisses were new and sloppy,
and your hands left bruises
on my chilled skin.
My friends said you were bad for me, but
I fell in love with your eyes of coal.

Dear Boy number 4,
you are just great. And that's the thing.
You are everything I could wish for, but
I want someone to tear me to pieces and
rebuild me into something more.
I'm sure you can taste it in the kisses you steal,
you can see it in my constantly elusive eyes.
I'm bad news, as I've told you from the start,
never for a second did I wish to own your heart.
I hoped to kill you quickly, but
I love you like a friend.

Dear Boy number 5,
You're the kind of boy our mothers warn us about.
Danger and Lust reflect in your eyes of green -
piercing against smoky red promises of more.
The circumstances have been clear to me from the start.
You remind me of my past self, when the memory
of heartbreak was so raw and fresh in my skin,
I couldn't help myself but try and burn everything.
The thought of getting close to someone and witness pain again
bridled my emotions into a slow, barely moving crawl.
I want to save you, but this wish is turning against me.
What would you do, if you saw me in need of saving?

Light another joint and pass it to me, huh?
Yeah....I'll add some lyrics here later :D

Thank you so much for reading! :love: Any feedback is greatly appreciated! :D
How did the poem make you feel, could you relate to it? :)

I'm so sorry I wasn't able to thank everyone for adding She always fell for boys who needed saving. to their favorites yet! There's just so much of you :P :D :heart: :tighthug:
Thank you again for getting it on front page! :glomp:


oh yeah, also, this poem might get updated in the future (perhaps I'll add Boy number 6? :) )
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh wow that was amazing! beautifully written! It says so much
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: :)
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Heaven-leigh5612 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student General Artist
"Knowing what you deserve and not settling
for any less, loving yourself, believing in yourself - these are the lessons
my battle scars taught me."

I couldn't have said it better myself - this is exactly what these kinda of boyfriends taught me :)

Another beautiful piece of writing xxxx
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: I'm glad you've learned the same lesson, I think it's one of the most important ones :)
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LoudSilenceLady Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this poem so much ♥ It can relate to so many relationships out there and I feel like it can also cheer up some girls. It has strength and confidence in it, which is very impressive.
The only thing I don't like about it is that there are some rhyming parts, and then it complete stops and starts again. You might have not done it on purpose though, I know it happens sometimes C:
It's still an amazing poem~
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: I just wrote the poem the way it came to me. when I read it to myself, I feel like every stop that is made belongs there, and rhymes don't disturb the overall flow.. of course everyone has their own opinion and taste :) <3
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foreverforwards Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
I Like it ALOT!!! made me feel pain and happiness and everything in between, "We were right in all the wrong ways" oh the feelings behind those words. very very well written once again a splendid piece.. Thank you for sharing XD
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! :heart: :D
I'm glad you could connect to the poem so much :)
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foreverforwards Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012
no thank you for sharing what you fee, it takes a certain kind of person who can write their feelings down and show them to millions of people.
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HaniaJedi Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can relate to it. My feelings have been shattered before. The last half of grade five when I moved to a new town, every girl in my class was nice to me, then my second day there they bullied me. For the first time, I felt hatred. I was like an angel on Earth, because I was such a nice kid. I never felt negative emotions besides sadness a few times, until then. I'm still me, but I changed a lot.
I don't think that you really dated five guys, right? XP
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
of course, such experiences change us a lot,
but they are necessary, if you hadn't changed then,
you would not be ready for the cruel world we live in as adults :)

um. no. :D the first one was my first big big crush at age 15, but
we never had anything serious (as you can see from the poem)
the second one was my first serious boyfriend,
the third one was a rebound and it was more of a friendly fling at parties,
I couldn't help myself but feel something for him, though.
the fourth one is my current umm...boyfriend, and the fifth one is a boy I have my eye on right now :)
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authorofthings Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012
nice one! :D
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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authorofthings Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012
no problem :D
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beautiful-creature Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The way you write is absolutely spectacular. That, and everything you've written is so relateable, if not from experience, then from what I know of others' experiences. But even with that, you seem to make it so individualistic and intimate and personal and its just beautiful <3
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
Your comment is amazing! :heart:
Thank you so much for reading and commenting,
I'm so glad I was able to portray my feelings in this poem
in such a way, that you could relate :D
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stealthyninja21 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Student General Artist
"You are everything I could wish for but I want someone to tear me to pieces and rebuild me into something more"
I like this part
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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fluffy333 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"We were fire one second, ice the next,
battle wounds were inflicted just to get a taste of blood."

That was my favorite part. This came out really well.
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart: :D
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fluffy333 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome.:)
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RisingWolve Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I can relate to this a lot, a few of these could so easily be or become my stories. :wow: It took me a while to stop thinking about why you stopped using past tense at boy #4, because at first it bugged me but I think I get it now. (I hope. ;P) Nevertheless, what a lovely poem! :+favlove:
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
I'm glad I managed to write it in such a way
that you could relate :D
It's great that you noticed I stopped using
past tense in the last two stanzas, it was done
on purpose, since both of these boys are still
in my life right now. I was finally able to
shake off Boy number 2, although some lines still
indicate that he left my heart recently. :)
Thank you again! :heart:
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RisingWolve Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I figured you had changed the tenses for that reason ;) I think it might be better off for you that you have taken boy 2 out of your life, I think I know someone almost just like him who I know if I could get away from, I would. (but this guy's not even half as nice as he seems... more like a mixture of 1 and 2 *sigh*)
And P.S. no problem! :D :hug:
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
How very observant of you :P
Yeah , I think it was the best decision of my life, really,
even though I didn't deliberately lose him.... I actually
spent ages trying to keep him...at least parts of him in my life,
but in the end it turned out that losing him was the thing that forced
me into seeking inner strength and I started becoming the person that,
in the past, I would look up to. Knowing what you deserve and not settling
for any less, loving yourself, believing in yourself - these are the lessons
my battle scars taught me. Thank you for reading and commenting once again! :heart: :hug:
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RisingWolve Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Trying to keep him... hmm, that's something I'm going to think about when forgetting my boy #2. :) You've learnt a lot more than I have in life, but it seems to have only made you stronger. I don't see many people out there like that. That's amazing! :heart: :love: And no problem, I'm so glad I read this :D
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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RisingWolve Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :)
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