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Dear Boy number 1,
you turned my world upside down,
changed green into red and smiles to tears.
Who would've thought that
your teasing and your games would
plant a fear into my bones, so strong that
I still cannot shake it?

Dear Boy number 2,
I don't think about you anymore
but I don't think about you any less, either.
Your love consumed me and
pushed me to the edge of insanity.
We were fire one second, ice the next,
battle wounds were inflicted just to get a taste of blood.
We were right in all the wrong ways, but to you,
holding another was second nature.

Dear Boy number 3,
you only ever touched me
in the dark alleys of town,
out of sight, but you were never
out of my mind.
Your kisses were new and sloppy,
and your hands left bruises
on my chilled skin.
My friends said you were bad for me, but
I fell in love with your eyes of coal.

Dear Boy number 4,
you are just great. And that's the thing.
You are everything I could wish for, but
I want someone to tear me to pieces and
rebuild me into something more.
I'm sure you can taste it in the kisses you steal,
you can see it in my constantly elusive eyes.
I'm bad news, as I've told you from the start,
never for a second did I wish to own your heart.
I hoped to kill you quickly, but
I love you like a friend.

Dear Boy number 5,
You're the kind of boy our mothers warn us about.
Danger and Lust reflect in your eyes of green -
piercing against smoky red promises of more.
The circumstances have been clear to me from the start.
You remind me of my past self, when the memory
of heartbreak was so raw and fresh in my skin,
I couldn't help myself but try and burn everything.
The thought of getting close to someone and witness pain again
bridled my emotions into a slow, barely moving crawl.
I want to save you, but this wish is turning against me.
What would you do, if you saw me in need of saving?

Light another joint and pass it to me, huh?
Yeah....I'll add some lyrics here later :D

Thank you so much for reading! :love: Any feedback is greatly appreciated! :D
How did the poem make you feel, could you relate to it? :)

I'm so sorry I wasn't able to thank everyone for adding She always fell for boys who needed saving. to their favorites yet! There's just so much of you :P :D :heart: :tighthug:
Thank you again for getting it on front page! :glomp:


oh yeah, also, this poem might get updated in the future (perhaps I'll add Boy number 6? :) )
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh wow that was amazing! beautifully written! It says so much
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: :)
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Heaven-leigh5612 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student General Artist
"Knowing what you deserve and not settling
for any less, loving yourself, believing in yourself - these are the lessons
my battle scars taught me."

I couldn't have said it better myself - this is exactly what these kinda of boyfriends taught me :)

Another beautiful piece of writing xxxx
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: I'm glad you've learned the same lesson, I think it's one of the most important ones :)
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LoudSilenceLady Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this poem so much ♥ It can relate to so many relationships out there and I feel like it can also cheer up some girls. It has strength and confidence in it, which is very impressive.
The only thing I don't like about it is that there are some rhyming parts, and then it complete stops and starts again. You might have not done it on purpose though, I know it happens sometimes C:
It's still an amazing poem~
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: I just wrote the poem the way it came to me. when I read it to myself, I feel like every stop that is made belongs there, and rhymes don't disturb the overall flow.. of course everyone has their own opinion and taste :) <3
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foreverforwards Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
I Like it ALOT!!! made me feel pain and happiness and everything in between, "We were right in all the wrong ways" oh the feelings behind those words. very very well written once again a splendid piece.. Thank you for sharing XD
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sasunaru16 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! :heart: :D
I'm glad you could connect to the poem so much :)
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foreverforwards Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012
no thank you for sharing what you fee, it takes a certain kind of person who can write their feelings down and show them to millions of people.
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HaniaJedi Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Student Writer
I can relate to it. My feelings have been shattered before. The last half of grade five when I moved to a new town, every girl in my class was nice to me, then my second day there they bullied me. For the first time, I felt hatred. I was like an angel on Earth, because I was such a nice kid. I never felt negative emotions besides sadness a few times, until then. I'm still me, but I changed a lot.
I don't think that you really dated five guys, right? XP
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